autumn haiku poem

dry leaves, bare trees
all these reflected
in your brown eyes


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a haiku poem for autumn haiku 2008


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36 comments:

  1. hi kouji
    the long braids were onions and garlic - surely you must use them in your food too!

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  2. wow, brown is really the season's most poetic color...

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  3. Reflective poetry!:) Beautiful!:)

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  4. lovely image

    you could leave out "all these" in L2 without any damage

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  5. Like the ambiguity of whether you mean autumn itself is reflected in the eyes or the end of a love affair. Awesome haiku Kouji.

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  6. What a beautiful sentiment in this haiku. That's what I love about these forms they're simple and yet portray such beauty that sometimes cannot be displayed through regular poetry. Thanks for the comment on my blog.

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  7. I have brown eyes - literally! I wish a lover would tell me that, if we happen to be in a place where autumn exists.

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  8. "brown eyes" or gray hairs? :) nice one kouji!

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  9. these last 3 odes to autumn leaves are all poignant and lovely:-)

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  10. Just read one haiku from Buson:

    In an old pond
    a frog ages
    while leaves fall

    ;-

    (Perhaps this is specially for myself...)

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  11. I love brown eyes ; ) Both of my boys have them! Hope you have a happy Friday tomorrow and an EXCELLENT weekend : )! Where do you live? I live in Pennsylvania.

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  12. some leaves do indeed look like big brown eyes

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  13. A love Haiku - love it Kouji

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  14. thanks for the comment, mediterranean kiwi. :)

    ah. onions and garlic. :) thought they looked familiar. i've seen something like that here. can't quite remember the province though. :)

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  15. thanks for the comment, wayfaring wanderer. :)

    and thanks for the kind words. :)

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  16. thanks for the comment, spool artist. :)

    looks like it. :) funny really. we have no autumn here in the philippines, so i wouldn't normally write about fall. but since i joined the autumn haiku 2008 collaborative blog, i find myself trying to imagine autumn, and to experience it vicariously.

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  17. thanks for the comment, borut. :)

    reflective indeed. :)

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  18. thanks for the comment, polona. :)

    indeed. was feeling iffy about that second line. thanks for the advice. :)

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  19. thanks for the comment, janice thomson. :)

    indeed. what i was going for. glad you liked it. :)

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  20. thanks for the comment, tsannie. :)

    glad you liked it. :)

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  21. thanks for the comment, jodapoet. :)

    indeed. that's why i like haiku as well. :)

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  22. thanks for the comment, adventure girl wanna be. :)

    so do i. :)

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  23. thanks for the comment, gem. :)

    indeed. since we have no autumn here in the philippines. :) or what would be reflected would be green, lush foliage. :)

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  24. thanks for the comment, dimaks. :)

    ah. gray hair is indeed beginning to appear. :)

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  25. thanks for the comment, janet. :)

    am glad you like them. :) was also feeling that i should contribute more to autumn haiku 2008. :)

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  26. thanks for the comment, tikkis. :)

    i like that. :) for me as well. :)

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  27. thanks for the comment, rebeckah. :)

    cute. :) sometimes though i wonder what it would be like to have blue eyes, or maybe green ones. :O

    hope you have an excellent weekend as well. :)
    i'm way over in manila, the philippines.

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  28. thanks for the comment, crafty green poet. :)

    am glad you liked it. :)

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  29. thanks for the comment, mediterranean kiwi. :)

    indeed. a tree looking back at me... :O

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  30. thanks for the comment, ashi. :)

    am glad you liked it. :) and it was nice of you to visit. :)

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  31. well kouji, as they say... autumn is a state of mind... you don't have to experience fall in order to see the wondrous symphony of the season's wildest times! keep haiku-ing!

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  32. thanks for the comment, spool artist. :)

    indeed. still, it would be interesting to experience it one of these days, i think. :)

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